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Friday, May 20, 2011

Break hers

I have a one sentence story up at MONKEYBICYCLE.


Mega thanks to Steven Seighman.
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21 comments:

  1. stevenMay 20, 2011 at 6:22 PM

    rachel, on reading your little story i had that feeling of seeing someone i haven't seen for a very long time, rehearsing my speaking to them for the first time in that long time, and then realizing it wasn't them in the first place. steven

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  2. Leslie MorganMay 20, 2011 at 6:36 PM

    Love the one-sentence story idea! Yours is marvelous, as we have come to expect from you.

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  3. Rachel FentonMay 20, 2011 at 8:11 PM

    Steven - Isn't it an uncanny feeling - recognising a perfect stranger. I did it all the time after my gran died - saw her everywhere - followed her down the street once or twice.

    I like your picture;
    are you leafing?



    Les - thank you - I like it too and I'm really thrilled to have a line in Monkeybicycle - very cool place that it is!

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  4. AnonymousMay 21, 2011 at 3:37 AM

    I could read your poetry all day.

    I also had a quick scan through the others. "Clinic" made me laugh, although I'm not sure it was supposed to!

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  5. Rachel FentonMay 21, 2011 at 4:24 AM

    Thanks, Donna!

    Clinic was a stand out for me, too - and Dan Purdue's language was interesting, I thought. I like his stuff.

    I always laugh at the "wrong" stuff - reassuring when someone else does, too.

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  6. LoriMay 21, 2011 at 4:31 AM

    Wow. That is so cool. I loved your piece, Rachel. So intense. And all the others were amazing too. You have good company. So great.

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  7. Rachel FentonMay 21, 2011 at 4:57 AM

    Lori - thank you! I love writing dinky things - this is the first one sentence story I've submitted - I should do more.

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  8. AnonymousMay 21, 2011 at 8:16 AM

    All sorts of resonances and echoes shimmering off this single sentence, Rachel.

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  9. Rachel FentonMay 21, 2011 at 5:07 PM

    Cheers, Dick. I like a sentence I can chew on but I was going for a more down to earth approach to this sentence than if I'd be gunning for a poetry line. So I'm glad it shimmers.

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  10. AndreaMay 21, 2011 at 10:39 PM

    What a lot you've got in that sentence!

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  11. Rachel FentonMay 21, 2011 at 10:45 PM

    Haha - and then some, Andrea!

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  12. Group 8May 23, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    Love it - fab!

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  13. Rachel FentonMay 23, 2011 at 4:36 PM

    Thanks, Nu :)

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  14. Rachel FentonMay 23, 2011 at 4:41 PM

    I meant Dan Powell earlier - but I like t'other Dan's stuff, too :)

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  15. AnonymousMay 29, 2011 at 5:56 AM

    Amazing that one sentence can say so much. I enjoyed all of these stories. Thanks for sharing!

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  16. Rachel FentonMay 29, 2011 at 1:49 PM

    Thanks for reading, Helen. Monkeybicycle is an excellent venue - well worth a read.

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  17. Mike McLarenMay 31, 2011 at 12:03 AM

    A short story with a sigh at the end. I enjoyed it.

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  18. Rachel FentonMay 31, 2011 at 1:53 AM

    Hey Mike, even one sentence has room for catharsis. Good to *see* you.

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  19. KirkJune 1, 2011 at 11:03 AM

    "where I scattered his ashes and it's starting to rain"

    The sudden reminder of the present. Evocative.

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  20. Rachel FentonJune 1, 2011 at 1:57 PM

    Hey Kirk - thanks for dropping in - and for reading. Appreciate that.

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  21. The Divorced Lady's Companion to Living in ItalyJune 8, 2011 at 6:56 AM

    Thanks so much for bringing me to the Monkey Bicycle site. Your entry so lovely. Ciao cat

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