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Sunday, October 30, 2011

To risk

My poem "Tourists" is up at Camel Saloon. Please feel free to amble on over - would love to know your thoughts on this one.

Many thanks to Russell Streur.
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9 comments:

  1. TitusOctober 30, 2011 at 3:16 PM

    Impressive: very.

    Loved the way you played with both time and the reader. Shifty, shifting work. Really liked it.

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  2. Rachel FentonOctober 30, 2011 at 3:47 PM

    Thank you, JoAnne :)

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  3. AnonymousOctober 31, 2011 at 1:00 AM

    And I loved the way you played with the readers expectations. At first it seemed and happy and light, then dark and sad and lonely, then ended on a note of hope. Shifty, shifting work is right. I also really liked it.

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  4. Rachel FentonOctober 31, 2011 at 3:20 AM

    Cool! Thanks, Helen.

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  5. Vanessa GebbieOctober 31, 2011 at 3:59 PM

    And me - enjoyed the smooth flow of the words and images - emotions unreeling. Thanks!

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  6. The Divorced Lady's Companion to Living in ItalyNovember 4, 2011 at 1:04 AM

    Wow Rachel! But I left my comment on the other site. I really felt this poem travelling through me, a good feeling. Ciao cat

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  7. Rachel FentonNovember 4, 2011 at 2:36 AM

    Thanks for such a close reading - very happy you read it and got so much back from it, Cat.

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  8. hebdenjoyNovember 14, 2011 at 12:36 AM

    Lovely work, Rachel

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  9. Rachel FentonNovember 14, 2011 at 1:25 AM

    Thank you, Joe :)

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