Friday, May 20, 2011

Break hers

I have a one sentence story up at MONKEYBICYCLE.


Mega thanks to Steven Seighman.

21 comments:

steven said...

rachel, on reading your little story i had that feeling of seeing someone i haven't seen for a very long time, rehearsing my speaking to them for the first time in that long time, and then realizing it wasn't them in the first place. steven

Leslie Morgan said...

Love the one-sentence story idea! Yours is marvelous, as we have come to expect from you.

Rachel Fenton said...

Steven - Isn't it an uncanny feeling - recognising a perfect stranger. I did it all the time after my gran died - saw her everywhere - followed her down the street once or twice.

I like your picture;
are you leafing?



Les - thank you - I like it too and I'm really thrilled to have a line in Monkeybicycle - very cool place that it is!

Donna Hosie said...

I could read your poetry all day.

I also had a quick scan through the others. "Clinic" made me laugh, although I'm not sure it was supposed to!

Rachel Fenton said...

Thanks, Donna!

Clinic was a stand out for me, too - and Dan Purdue's language was interesting, I thought. I like his stuff.

I always laugh at the "wrong" stuff - reassuring when someone else does, too.

Lori said...

Wow. That is so cool. I loved your piece, Rachel. So intense. And all the others were amazing too. You have good company. So great.

Rachel Fenton said...

Lori - thank you! I love writing dinky things - this is the first one sentence story I've submitted - I should do more.

patteran said...

All sorts of resonances and echoes shimmering off this single sentence, Rachel.

Rachel Fenton said...

Cheers, Dick. I like a sentence I can chew on but I was going for a more down to earth approach to this sentence than if I'd be gunning for a poetry line. So I'm glad it shimmers.

Andrea said...

What a lot you've got in that sentence!

Rachel Fenton said...

Haha - and then some, Andrea!

WOMEN RULE WRITER said...

Love it - fab!

Rachel Fenton said...

Thanks, Nu :)

Rachel Fenton said...

I meant Dan Powell earlier - but I like t'other Dan's stuff, too :)

helencaldwell said...

Amazing that one sentence can say so much. I enjoyed all of these stories. Thanks for sharing!

Rachel Fenton said...

Thanks for reading, Helen. Monkeybicycle is an excellent venue - well worth a read.

Annotated Margins said...

A short story with a sigh at the end. I enjoyed it.

Rachel Fenton said...

Hey Mike, even one sentence has room for catharsis. Good to *see* you.

Kirk said...

"where I scattered his ashes and it's starting to rain"

The sudden reminder of the present. Evocative.

Rachel Fenton said...

Hey Kirk - thanks for dropping in - and for reading. Appreciate that.

The Divorced Lady's Companion to Living in Italy said...

Thanks so much for bringing me to the Monkey Bicycle site. Your entry so lovely. Ciao cat