Saturday, February 19, 2011

To risk watching

Auckland, November 2007. Photo taken by me: I'd been here three months.

Auckland is now available for viewing at The Camel Saloon.

Lowly kindness and high regards to barkeeper Russell Streur.

12 comments:

Dominic Rivron said...

Like it. Dylan Thomas, Blake... Whose next?

Titus said...

Knock-out, Rachel. Unexpected movement in the poem, I liked the tone very much and a great two final lines.

Leslie Morgan said...

The poem is absolutely stunning, Rachel! Thank you. After Blake, indeed. I love the sense that the photo could be anywhere in the English-speaking world. Kind of "Wait, WHERE is this exactly?"

Kudoes to your barkeeper, even though I need to stay out of the saloon.

Rachel Fenton said...

Thank you, Dominic - I've "done" most of the Norton Anthology! Some more successfully than others, admittedly! I like the Romantics best, though - shared aims, perhaps. I can but aspire. Most will stay in the file!

Rachel Fenton said...

Thank you, JoAnne - it's one of those poems where you wish the original had been much longer, but the restriction actually forces you to be more direct.

Rachel Fenton said...

Thank you, Leslie - that's exactly what I was hoping - it isn't a specific dig (and dig is precicely what I am doing with poems in the collection this is part of) at Auckland, it is a flag at the pride of the English speaking world - so accomplished and yet - oops, why no [ramps]?

[...] = choose own failing.

I'm a strictly fruit juice girl myself, Les - have an OJ on me!

Lori said...

Sounds exotic. Now I have to pull out my dusty Blake poetry volume to be able to appreciate the connection. Don't you put me to work?

Donna Hosie said...

I remain in total awe of your talent with words, Rachel.

Rachel Fenton said...

Lori - I always look forward to your comments - "exotic" - I love it!

Rachel Fenton said...

Donna - *blush* that's a lovely compliment - thank you!

D.M. SOLIS said...

Nice. Your work just keeps getting better, more sparse and more crisp. Thank you, peace,

Diane

Rachel Fenton said...

Thank you, Diane, I really appreciate the feedback.